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Mar. 6th, 2005 | 03:20 am

misty night
evening cast
i feel the dew drops drop
condensing, forming on what was hot
i see you in the distance
standing there
waiting for me
your hands in the air
i see you reach
but i cannot grab
for you are too far
and i am not enough of a man
you look at me with eyes glazed over
your heart worn on your sleeve
makes no sense why you wouldn't go forward
for i am what you see
but with eyes glazed over
my heart will beat
i stand in front of you
i am the man you see
now what you do
only you can know
i move through the dew
and together we find you
you were lost in the mist
the eyes were my light
no hiding anymore
no beginnings of snow
you are not pure
you don't even know
you fell like a dew drop
that formed from my eye
you are my heart
and i will forever cry

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Naceena Salteris

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from: salteris
date: Mar. 6th, 2005 05:31 pm (UTC)
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wow!!! that alomst sounds like a dream. i like that one. *hugs*

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 7th, 2005 12:00 am (UTC)
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thanks. why the hug? :)

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Naceena Salteris

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from: salteris
date: Mar. 7th, 2005 01:45 am (UTC)
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your cute and i hug everyone ...*hugs*

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 8th, 2005 06:10 am (UTC)
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thanks then :)

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Naceena Salteris

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from: salteris
date: Mar. 8th, 2005 02:37 pm (UTC)
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your welcome

Peace!

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from: cold_filtered
date: Mar. 6th, 2005 10:16 pm (UTC)
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This is good-

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 7th, 2005 12:00 am (UTC)
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thanks. what in particular do you like about it?

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from: cold_filtered
date: Mar. 8th, 2005 04:09 am (UTC)
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beautifully tragic

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 8th, 2005 06:02 am (UTC)
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in a tragically beautiful way?

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omg!

from: ch0ke_0n_this
date: Mar. 7th, 2005 07:56 am (UTC)
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i love your poem..its nice to meet a fellow poetry writer..-jumps around in her chair-
much love,
-Jess

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Tim

Re: omg!

from: visions
date: Mar. 7th, 2005 03:05 pm (UTC)
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be careful jumping around.. you might choke. ;)

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from: ch0ke_0n_this
date: Mar. 9th, 2005 05:30 am (UTC)
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haha..yup thats funny...lol...no im shure i wont...but i might choke now cuz im LAUGHING!
hehe..see what you do to me..dang.
<3 -Jess

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Tim

Re: omg!

from: visions
date: Mar. 9th, 2005 05:34 am (UTC)
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hehe. glad i could be of.. service. :)

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Re: omg!

from: ch0ke_0n_this
date: Mar. 9th, 2005 05:34 pm (UTC)
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*smiles*

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from: one_point_five
date: Mar. 15th, 2005 11:59 pm (UTC)
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cool....that one is niiice i can't think of the word but u can almost imagine the scene or like what is happening.

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 16th, 2005 01:58 am (UTC)
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thanks

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miss paranoia

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from: punkchic1
date: Mar. 29th, 2005 09:53 am (UTC)
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wow i like your writing... awesome. =)

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 29th, 2005 02:06 pm (UTC)
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thanks. i figured you would like this one.

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miss paranoia

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from: punkchic1
date: Mar. 30th, 2005 02:22 am (UTC)
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why because i too have had many "misty night(s)..." haha. =) i read many of your poems and like them all.

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Mar. 30th, 2005 02:34 am (UTC)
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glad you like them :)

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from: revati_12
date: May. 4th, 2005 05:17 pm (UTC)
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wow,u r really angst.Anyway a nice composition

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Tim

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from: visions
date: May. 5th, 2005 01:06 am (UTC)
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i find that odd. i am far from anxiety driven.

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Глеб

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from: cower2spb
date: Jul. 7th, 2005 08:45 am (UTC)
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Man!! u ROCK!! it realy cool. %)

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Jul. 7th, 2005 02:13 pm (UTC)
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thanks. glad you liked it.

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