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Oct. 19th, 2004 | 06:12 pm

sweet smiles
speaking of innocence lost
delicate lines
misplaced hearts

from one glance
i knew something more
your eyes spoke words
and tales of lore

i smiled just once
enough for you to see
no words spoken
not between you and me

i wait for the chance
to call you mine
i wait for our bodies
and our hearts to intertwine

i see the chance
just give it some time
one day i will be yours
and you will be mine

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from: __annabelle__
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 01:14 am (UTC)
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Aww, that was lovely! Who are you speaking of, in this poem?

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 03:03 am (UTC)
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for someone special, whomever they may be, for whenever they come along.

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SoulAngel 6

awwwwwww

from: astralscorp_13
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 07:37 am (UTC)
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beautiful
seductive
love it

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Tim

Re: awwwwwww

from: visions
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 05:53 pm (UTC)
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thanks

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from: bluepixiy
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 12:27 pm (UTC)
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that was beautiful (i don't know you ) while that person might come around

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 05:53 pm (UTC)
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thanks

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from: artfullywhole
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 11:22 pm (UTC)
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very deep, solid meaning behind the words

though I think it would have been presented better had it been a free-verse style

still, it's well written

(:

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 02:13 am (UTC)
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just natural word selection. no attempt at a scheme.

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black_rainbow87

nicely done!

from: black_rainbow87
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 12:17 am (UTC)
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hi, i think this is an awesome poem...i hope you don't mind me borrowing it...i agree it is lovely and suductive!

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Tim

Re: nicely done!

from: visions
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 02:14 am (UTC)
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umm. yes i do mind. that is called plagerism.

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jenne

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from: hellloitslate
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 05:56 am (UTC)
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i'd forgotten the beauty in your words.

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 06:52 am (UTC)
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why? have my words been particularly ugly recently?

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No Angel

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from: no___angel
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 01:11 pm (UTC)
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keep writing like that and you are sure to find that someone special

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 21st, 2004 01:55 pm (UTC)
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the writing wont necessarily help find someone.

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be_dazzle_me

hmmm...

from: be_dazzle_me
date: Oct. 22nd, 2004 11:10 am (UTC)
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i am getting the impression that you are alittle egotistical about your poetry. that sucks.

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Tim

Re: hmmm...

from: visions
date: Oct. 22nd, 2004 02:59 pm (UTC)
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i get the impression that you dont know anything about me.. or wait, that is a fact.

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sweet poem

from: one_point_five
date: Oct. 30th, 2004 07:45 pm (UTC)
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hey, i love your poem i think it is sweet. I like the way its all put together and the words u use. like they said seductive. someday we will all find that special one.

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Tim

Re: sweet poem

from: visions
date: Oct. 30th, 2004 08:20 pm (UTC)
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thanks

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