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Oct. 8th, 2004 | 11:12 am

once the moon passed
the darkness slid through the heavy sky
trying to find something to grab hold
tearing through its hands
the burns settle like thorns
burying themselves with deep disdain
holding strong
like a silken thread
i grasp
for the life i want
for the dream that slides effortlessly by

i cry as i am forced to let go
releasing myself from the bindings
my own tether
this dream was not meant to be had
the scars
the burns
they are each their own tomb
holding the live and the dead

i settle in slumber
silently waiting for the sun to rise
to bask with renewed vigor
i see nothing that opens my eyes

in the end
i wake up
only to die

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SoulAngel 6

hehe

from: astralscorp_13
date: Oct. 8th, 2004 04:56 pm (UTC)
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awsome

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Tim

Re: hehe

from: visions
date: Oct. 8th, 2004 07:13 pm (UTC)
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awesome is an interesting response.

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from: artfullywhole
date: Oct. 8th, 2004 10:53 pm (UTC)
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"heavy sky"
That's an interesting description. An enjoyable piece.

Odd, but I like the sense of despair it has.

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 8th, 2004 11:03 pm (UTC)
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thanks. i am glad you like it. i havent really wrote anything in that format before.

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gentlerose

Happened again!

from: gentlerose
date: Oct. 9th, 2004 10:11 am (UTC)
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I forgot to copy my comment and once again LJ ate it for breakfast I guess.

If I were able to rewrite what I wrote earlier, I would be happy to do it, but it is 6:10 am here, and I have not had a wink of sleep. Perhaps tomorrow, I will say more.

One thing I can tell you, keep writing!

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Tim

Re: Happened again!

from: visions
date: Oct. 9th, 2004 09:11 pm (UTC)
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heh. lj just doesnt like you.

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nice

from: ficklecreature
date: Oct. 9th, 2004 08:29 pm (UTC)
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wow. i really like your poem. you really put a lot of emotion in this that made me understand exactly what you were saying...
i hope you continue to enter your poems and stuff, i would really like to see more of your work.

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Tim

Re: nice

from: visions
date: Oct. 9th, 2004 09:11 pm (UTC)
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thanks. i write when i feel i have something to say. so there will be more i assure you.

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SuperStar

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from: bench
date: Oct. 11th, 2004 12:29 am (UTC)
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BEAUTIFUL!

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 11th, 2004 05:32 am (UTC)
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thanks, glad you liked it.

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from: _cupcake86
date: Oct. 14th, 2004 04:22 am (UTC)
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hey,
I really liked this. I can really relate to how you feel. and you seem cute
love always me

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 14th, 2004 05:40 am (UTC)
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thanks

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You

from: way2gd2btru
date: Oct. 14th, 2004 11:10 pm (UTC)
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Hey......
I am simply an anonymous voyuer who enjoys reading your thoughts. I feel like i'm somehow guilty for prying into your life without permission, so i thought id announce myself - as the peeping tom that i have become :)
I hope u keep up the writing.

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Tim

Re: You

from: visions
date: Oct. 15th, 2004 05:37 am (UTC)
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well, hello there. and i am glad you like my writing.

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black_rainbow87

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from: black_rainbow87
date: Oct. 15th, 2004 12:09 pm (UTC)
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i really like this poem...i haven't been reading your stuff in a while...i thought i'd check it out again and then there was this new one! and i love it! i love all the imagery!
keep it up!

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 15th, 2004 02:24 pm (UTC)
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thanks

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from: __resuscitate
date: Oct. 18th, 2004 07:08 pm (UTC)
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new journal: crownofstorms

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 18th, 2004 08:46 pm (UTC)
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addded

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No Angel

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from: no___angel
date: Oct. 18th, 2004 08:46 pm (UTC)
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amazing journal. keep up the creative intensity!

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Oct. 18th, 2004 09:17 pm (UTC)
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thanks

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your cute

from: bluepixiy
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 12:33 pm (UTC)
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i love what you wrote keep it up dont stop you seem to have something. also your very cute k.i.t talk to you later ok

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Tim

Re: your cute

from: visions
date: Oct. 20th, 2004 05:53 pm (UTC)
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haha. thanks. i have my moments.

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roxy

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from: crownofstorms
date: Nov. 5th, 2004 12:12 am (UTC)
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very nice. :)

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Tim

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from: visions
date: Nov. 5th, 2004 04:10 am (UTC)
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was that the sorta thing you were looking for?

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your poems are wonderful

from: ghettogodess
date: Apr. 4th, 2005 12:58 am (UTC)
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i like your poems they seem like they come from the heart and not just ideas written on paper. i can relate to some of the poems you have written you should keep up the work. i really like how you write your poems as if they come from the heart but they flow as if it was just words spilling out of the mind makin each poem beautiful and original.

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Tim

Re: your poems are wonderful

from: visions
date: Apr. 4th, 2005 01:08 am (UTC)
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thanks, they are very much from the heart.

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